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Discussion Boards => Off-Topic => Topic started by: BK_Adores_Chase on November 22, 2010, 01:28:39 pm
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We spend a lot of our time working – sure, to pay the bills, but also to buy the material items that we desire – don’t let the life you’ve worked so hard for go up in smoke without setting yourself up for compensation.
^ part of my conclusion for my persuasive speech on home inventory. Thanks for your input!
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It makes sense to me. My Grammar isn't very good , though.
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It appears to make clear sense. Though I don't know what all lead up to this concluding sentence, so I couldn't tell you how well it fits with the rest of the text, but sounds good to me I reckon. Good luck with you speech! :)
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i understood it
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yupp
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Makes sense, and appears grammatically correct. (I am "good at grammar").
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I understood your conclusion!
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Yea, gota get some compensation, not only bills. Compensation is needed to keep going. :D
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It appears to make sense to me, and also it is very professional sounding. I love it! ;D
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We spend a lot of our time working – sure, to pay the bills, but also to buy the material items that we desire – don’t let the life you’ve worked so hard for go up in smoke without setting yourself up for compensation.
^ part of my conclusion for my persuasive speech on home inventory. Thanks for your input!
It's a run-on sentence. Try this way:
We spend a lot of our time working to pay the bills, but also to buy the material items that we desire. Don’t let the life you’ve worked so hard for go up in smoke without setting yourself up for compensation.
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